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                   Before 
                  “Volant Consulting serves small and mid-sized companies, 
                    with twenty years experience in the legal industry. We offer 
                    the flexibility of on-call experts for computer technology 
                    questions and needs without the expense of a full-time systems 
                    staff member. You benefit from years of experience while saving 
                    money. 
                  “Clients call with questions ranging from ‘what 
                    brand of computer should I buy?’ to ‘is there a 
                    service pack for my software to clear up these communications 
                    problems?’ or ‘what type of broadband service should 
                    we use?’ 
                  “Companies face the daunting task of keeping up 
                    with technology trends, without the benefit of a full-time 
                    technical staff. Volant Consulting can act as your ‘Part-Time 
                    IS Director,’ helping you to get the most out of your 
                    technology investments.” 
                   
                  Analysis 
                  
                    - The first sentence doesnt even say what they do; 
                      its not until halfway through the second sentence 
                      that you learn theyre in IT support. 
 
                    - Their unique selling proposition (USP) is buried in the 
                      last line. Did you read that far? I only did when I forced 
                      myself to. In the old “introduction, body, conclusion” 
                      format, the reader doesn’t learn the USP unless they 
                      read right to the end.
 
                    - The concept of the part-time IS director is 
                      a good one, but they missed that this part-time person needs 
                      to be a full-time expert.
 
                    - Would a non-expert really ask “is there a service 
                      pack for my software to clear up these communications problems”?
 
                   
                   The market positioning exercise with Volant revealed that: 
                  
                    -  IT systems are critical to the clients’ 
                      ability to run their businesses 
 
                    - clients are afraid of IT failures, want their IT to be 
                      invisible and “just work”, and therefore they 
                      need experts
 
                    - clients are willing to make a reasonable investment, but 
                      don’t want excessive costs that would break 
                      the bank or leave them feeling gouged
 
                    - Volant’s market niche is firms that are too small 
                      to justify a full-time IT expert.
 
                   
                  Thus Volant’s concept of part-time access to 
                    full-time experts. 
                  During the session we got to the meat of this. In the old 
                    days, the law firms who are Volant’s clients had office 
                    managers could act as a part-time computer person. Now things 
                    are too complicated and the firms are scared. They’re 
                    scared of not being able to support what they have, and scared 
                    of IT failing them. They want an IT support firm who can shoot 
                    in, get it fixed, and shoot out. Volant’s clients want 
                    to practice law, and want to hire full-time experts on a quarter-hour 
                    basis. Period.  
                  
                  After 
                  “Volant Consulting provides outstanding IT support 
                    to small and medium firms. 
                    
                  “Many firms dont need full-time IT staff, 
                    but they need the expertise that only full-time IT professionals 
                    can provide. 
                    
                  “Technology has become critical to running a business. 
                    Its no longer okay to hear that the network will be 
                    back up tomorrow. Servers, firewalls, workstations, software, 
                    viruses, and spyware have become too complicated to leave 
                    it to staff who just happen to know computers. Volant’s 
                    consultants are full-time IT experts, who provide however 
                    little, or however much, support you need.” 
                  
                  Results 
                    
                  First, it’s structured in what journalists call a “reverse 
                    pyramid”, with the most potent concise headline at the 
                    top. It’s immediately followed by a secondary (more detailed) 
                    description, that shores up the first hook but with more detail, 
                    then it gets into the specifics. 
                  This is designed so that readers that fit Volant’s niche 
                    market (their ideal customer profile) can identify 
                    with the first sentence, and are compelled to read 
                    on. Then they’re soothed by the credibility Volant 
                    has to solve their problem. 
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